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The characters of the story are, for the most part, well done. VL-15 is desperate to recover the memories of her previous life, all the while being unsure of who to fully trust or who she even is. On the other hand, Craig is rather generic as far as sci-fi protagonists go. His boss, Dr Amelia Wong, the leader of a small pocket of civilisation under siege from both external enemies and internal frictions, who must increasingly choose between her principles and her desire to keep control, all of which is painfully well done. We also have Sekiya Garza, a double agent sent to bring the Hub down from within, allying with the enigmatic and menacing machine known as La Borg. Overall, I liked most of the characters in the story and I would particularly like to see how VL-15's story develops in later instalments.

In conclusion, I think that O’Donnell has a lot of potential, with some interesting ideas, a compelling story, and some likeable characters, but the overall issues with the writing style kept me from giving this a much higher review score.