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|comment= I might be to anal, but I really, really think that the premis is so mind-bogglingly idiotic, and it could have been done - it has been done, countless times, in cyber-punk - so much better, that it would require the kind of suspension of disbelief that I would be not prepared to make. But then, I am not exactly the target market, am I?   

|comment= Ah yes. Well, I don't read cyber punk - but I imagine quite a few older teens do? But then, this is probably intended for younger teens not ready for that market yet. It's well-written, and the hybrid premise is quite popular in children's books at the moment. I haven't really seen any that take a mob-rule angle as opposed to the effect on an individual angle, so that does set it apart and is also timely, given that every mosque is currently suspected of doubling as a terrorist academy, non? Having said that, and as I said, the virus itself in the book is treated very crudely, and it does let it down somewhat. Still, first book and all that, what what. The dialogue's great and that's what usually lets a first book down.   

|comment= If so, then it will be a good introduction to 'proper' s-f.